HAUNTED HOUSE MAKE A SECRET
Once upon a time in a big city there was a little house that was different of the others, this house was very old and nobody lived there or that people thought.
The smith’s had decided to move to the old house because of the business. They were a family of four members: the father, the mother, John (the boy) and Lilly (the little girl).
Lilly was 8 years old, she has got blond curly hear and has a fair complexion. She was very normal in appearance but she was very strange and special, she always was reading books about the magic, fairies, witches, vampires and ghosts. But she had a problem to get friends because she didn’t like play rude sports, and so nobody wanted to be her friend, child were very cruel to her, they said: “Lilly is mad, she is strange, nobody can trust on her”.
In this occasion Lilly wanted to change the situation, she didn’t want to be shy, pessimistic or strange to the others kids, she had decided to change her life in this new place, in this new house, in this new neighbourhood, so she had to make a plan. When she arrived at her new bedroom she got rid of all her things about magic dreams and started to do physical exercises that she considered important to play with kids, she didn’t know how to move her body, so exercises like run, jog were very difficult to her, she tried hard, but her brother was very impolite with her. One night when Lilly was doing exercises in her bedroom; he appeared suddenly with an ugly mask making horrible sounds in the door, so he gets to frightened her to death and she start to cry noisily, and when their parents saw this situation, John got to be punished. John was very angry and he said: “Lilly is a silly girl; she always is crying like a baby, she never has got friends”. The mother sent John to his bedroom and said: “don’t believe, your brother is a boy, he didn’t know what he is speaking”. Then she got out.
But Lilly was very sad again, in that bedroom, she was alone nobody knew all of things that she was doing to be a friendly person, nobody.
Suddenly she heard a sound in her closet like a voice. She thought that it was her brother again but remembered that he was in his bedroom. “What is it?” she said. “If someone be there, please get out” nobody replied. She opens the closet and she feels the cold passing on her face like a gust of wind and when it finished, someone talk to her behind: “My name is Harry and he is Holly, do you want to be our friend?”
She was really surprised but happy: “do you want to be my friends” she asked again. “Yes, we want to be your friend do you want?” Lilly couldn’t believe it; someone wanted to be her friend. “Yes! I want thanks”.
Holly and Harry turned Lilly in a friendly girl, they always was talking, playing and making funny things, things that Lilly can’t do alone. Sometimes her parents heard that Lilly spoke alone in her bedroom and they were very worried about it but Lilly seemed to be happier that time that all the rest of her life.
One day Lilly was very excited and when she went in her bedroom she started to tell Holly and Harry about something very interesting and important to her, “I have got a friend in the school, she is very nice”. When she saw the faces of her friends she felt confused. “Aren’t you happy?” they replied “don’t worry we are very happy for you.” And she starts to smile.
That night Holly started to talk to Harry: “Now its time, we did a good action, we must go” said in a sad way. “I don’t want to go without her, she is our friend I want to stay with her” Harry replied “But you know we can’t stay, we had a mission but now it is finished, tomorrow we must to tell Lilly the truth. We are ghosts”.
The next day when Lilly come in to the bedroom and was speaking about her new friend, she saw strange faces on her friends. “What happens? Something is wrong?” Harry decided to talk. “We must say you something important” he said in bad way “What is it?” she was worried. “We must go” said harry and she was surprised “why are you angry? It’s because I have a new friend?” she was crying “No, we are happy because you are happy” start holly “but there is something that we didn’t say to you, it’s a secret. We lived in this house long time ago; we were alone until that you arrived. We were very happy but it can’t be forever, we had to do a good action to go…” now harry speak to her “long time ago when we were with our parents we get to be sick and nobody could cure us, so we died” Lilly was very surprised but she was hearing the story “so, we are ghosts and we had a mission to do a good action before leave this world. When you were alone we wanted to be with you and we were your friend, you are very important to us but you have got a new friend, so we don’t have more to do for you, I’m very sad but happy in the same time”.
Suddenly appeared a light in the sky “we must go harry” said holly while Lilly was crying “we love you Lilly, you must be happy” Lilly crying in a desperate way but happy “I love you thanks for all, I’m very happy, thanks!” then they disappeared.
Since that day Lilly because of the kids ghosts got a lot of friends, because she knew for they what friendship was. She was very grateful to them.
The End ~
Once upon a time in a big city there was a little house that was different of the others, this house was very old and nobody lived there or people thought that.
The smith’s family had decided to move to the old house because of the business. They were a family of four members: the father, the mother, John (the boy) and Lilly (the little girl).
Lilly was a girl very strange but special, she always was reading books about the magic, fairies, witches, vampires and ghosts. But she had a problem to get friends because she didn’t like play rude sports, and so nobody wanted to be her friend, child were very cruel to her, they said: “Lilly is mad, she is strange, nobody can trust on her”.
In this occasion Lilly wanted to change the situation, she didn’t want to be shy, pessimistic or strange to the others kids, she had decided to change her life in this new place, in this new house, in this new neighbourhood, so she had to make a plan. When she arrived at her new bedroom she got rid of all her things about magic dreams and started to do physical exercises that she considered important to play with kids, she didn’t know how to move her body, so exercises like run, jog was very difficult to her, she tried hard, but her brother was very impolite with her. One night when Lilly was making exercises in her bedroom; he appeared suddenly with an ugly mask making horrible sounds in the door, so he gets to frightened her to death and she start to cry noisily, and when their parents saw this situation, John got to be punished. John was very angry and he said: “Lilly is a silly girl; she always is crying like a baby, she never has got friends”. The mother sent John to his bedroom and said: “don’t believe, your brother is a boy, he didn’t know what he is speaking”. Then she got out.
But Lilly was very sad again, in that bedroom, she was alone nobody knew all of things that she was doing to be a friendly person, nobody.
Suddenly she heard a sound in her closet like a voice. She thought that it was her brother again but remembered that he was in his bedroom. “What is it?” she said. “If someone be there, please get out” nobody replied. She opens the closet and she feels the cold passing on her face like a gust of wind and when it finished, someone talk to her behind: “My name is Harry and he is Holly, do you want to be our friend?”
She was really surprised but happy: “do you want to be my friends” she asked again. “Yes, we want to be your friend do you want?” Lilly couldn’t believe it; someone wanted to be her friend. “Yes! I want thanks”.
Holly and Harry turned Lilly in a friendly girl, they always was talking, playing and making funny things, things that Lilly can’t do alone. Sometimes her parents heard that Lilly spoke alone in her bedroom and they were very worried about it but Lilly seemed to be happier that time that all the rest of her life.
One day Lilly was very excited and when she went in her bedroom she started to tell Holly and Harry about something very interesting and important to her, “I have got a friend in the school, she is very nice”. When she saw the faces of her friends she felt confused. “Aren’t you happy?” they replied “don’t worry we are very happy for you.” And she starts to smile.
That night Holly started to talk to Harry: “Now its time, we did a good action, we must go” said in a sad way. “I don’t want to go without her, she is our friend I want to stay with her” Harry replied “But you know we can’t stay, we had a mission but now it is finished, tomorrow we must to tell to Lilly the truth. We are ghost”.
The next day when Lilly come in to the bedroom and was speaking about her new friend, she saw strange faces on her friends. “What happens? Something is wrong?” Harry decided to talk. “We must say you something important” he said in bad way “What is it?” she was worried. “We must to go” said harry and she was surprised “why are you angry? It’s because I have a new friend?” she was crying “No, we are happy because you are happy” start holly “but there is something that we didn’t say you, it’s a secret. We lived in this house long time ago; we were alone until that you arrived. We were very happy but it can’t be forever, we had to do a good action to go…” now harry speak to her “long time ago when we were with our parents we get to be sick and nobody could cure us, so we died” Lilly was very surprised but she was hearing the story “so, we are ghosts and we had a mission to do a good action before leave this world. When you were alone we wanted to be with you and we were your friend, you are very important to us but you have got a new friend, so we don’t have more to do for you, I’m very sad but happy in the same time”.
Suddenly a light in the sky appeared “we must go harry” said holly while Lilly was crying “we love you Lilly, you must be happy” Lilly crying in a desperate way but happy “I love you thanks for all, I’m very happy, thanks!” then they disappeared.
Since that day Lilly because of the kids ghosts got a lot of friends, because she knew for they what friendship was. She was very grateful to them.
HAUNTED HOUSE MAKE A SECRET REFLECTION
About the narrative story haunted house make a secret was a short story very interesting to do. When I decide to write about it at the beginning I couldn’t decide what exactly write about. I wanted to narrate a story that was significant and caused a feeling.
When I had the main idea of my narrative work I read “the elements of a story” and read also some short stories in the handout like “the little red riding hood” and “the little girl a the wolf”. Then I had some ideas about organized my story, the characters, settings, the way and the time to write, and the theme and moral topic.
Then I could do a draft narrating all the story about my characters and the strange situation that they live.
The troubles that I had with my story was mainly the organization of this and the grammar, but in the draft and in the final writing I did a lot of corrections that I could notice and I could improve it. I always have complications about put in order my ideas but with the short story that we read I had more exercise to do it best.
This is my favourite work :)
Thank you, Ma. Paz
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